Yosef on "Hitbodedut in the women's foyer - by Yosef"
Wrote this today. For some reason this feels like a very Mimaamakimish piece...thoughts? (Lines 2-4 feel the weakest to me. Are they unnecessary?) ----------A dancer prays inside their vernacular, not...
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I moved this to the Poetry section.I think its a great Great Poem! I wrote one on the same topic a while ago, (remember that one dena?) but i like yours a lot better. the Rhythm is kind of random, but...
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yos--i read this now and i think i really get it (i remember you showed it to me a whiles back)...rhythm, i think, is really keen, if you read it as a hip-hop freestylin' poem--it doesn't hesitate to...
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Here is a very reworked version (comments?):Torso lean (gnarled paean plume (bodied liturgical bloom A dancer prays in her vernacular, silent, sober, biblical (tonguing her umbilical purr her hymns in...
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its fascinating to see this rework. It makes me wonder: was this what you were going for all along, or did it just morph as you thought about it. Its almost like in the first version it seemed dancing...
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Shlomo, you're certainly not way off. I think in the latter version I tried to level out the metaphor,make it work both ways, such that neither dance nor prayer are metaphors for the other but are both...
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